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    dots Submission Name: Who are the fortunate ones?dots
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    Author: devil666
    ASL Info:    26/M/NewHampshire
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 9/50/38
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsWho are the fortunate ones?dots
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    Flyin high in the air over jungles and oceans,
    Blissfully unaware of all noise and commotion,
    Lost in their own world, these beautiful winged birds,
    Livin on planet earth, but still in different worlds.

    Lookin at these birds rouses jealousy and admiration,
    To be free like these mute creatures is a man's aspiration.
    Chained by religion, political boundaries and society,
    Humans take birth, lead boring lives and die quietly.

    Using nothin but their light wings for transport,
    Fortunate birds fly proudly without visa or passport.
    Never do they worry about groceries or their daily food,
    Huntin at will and making nests with pieces of wood.

    Instantly start a family once they're full grown,
    Not worryin about mortgages and those home loans.
    Leadin adventurous lives, moving from place to place,
    New morning, new location, its holidayin for days.

    Humans fake it, sadness inside and happiness on the exterior,
    Lead a miserable existence but still still claim to be superior.
    Tryin to fool the world but all they can never fool themselves,
    Leadin materialic lives humans make their lives a living hell.

    Birds lead a life with no complications and pretence,
    With dense trees, rivers and the blue skies as friends.
    So these jealous humans lock birds in those strong steel cages,
    Humans always gloomy till they lay stiff in wooden cases.




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      I really like this. It is well thought out... I have had a few similar thoughts, but you did an amazing job expressing it. Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2010-04-07 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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