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    dots Submission Name: Light Your Candledots

    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLight Your Candledots

    Yesterday as time was flying by I walked down the street, looking at the sky with many thoughts runing threw my mind.
    As I had passed a corner I saw a old man pan handling for change, Crying out that he was hungry, saying he just needed a dollor or so to get some food.
    I stood there listing to him as he was telling me all of this,
    I felt the tears well up in my eyes,
    And I said sir, I wish I could help but I dont have any money,
    He looked down for a second and in a moments time he looked back up,
    A second latter he said Miss can I ask you to do me a favor?
    I said yes what is it?
    Loooking me strait in the eyes he said when you go into the church tonight will you say a pray for me, please I have a daughter and a few more kids,
    I dont mean any thing Mean,
    Then As I looked at him,
    I felt compassion,
    Then I cryied out tears were falling,
    As I promised him and then told him,
    Carrie your candle,
    Run threw the darknesss and carrie your candle, And go light the World with its brightness.

    Submitted on 2009-06-01 10:00:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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