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    dots Submission Name: Synergydots
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    Author: was_i_ever_real
    ASL Info:    23 _ f _ tx
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 194/91/52
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 549
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 415



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    dotsSynergydots
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    We are
    Cold Rhythm and
    Fiery Beat
    Creating silent Harmony,
    beautiful simplicity
    reacting on a loyalty
    beyond accepted interpretation...
    Destined from creation
    an enigmatic relation-ship

    We are
    Elements stripped
    to the most lucid form-
    Born as one, but torn
    A paradoxal same

    We are
    twin flames.




    Submitted on 2009-06-01 13:18:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My evil subconscious will probably want to steal some of these images at some point in the future, so I'll call them haunting, cold and hot flames, describes music indeed!
    | Posted on 2010-07-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      A relationship poem-- this is intriguing and a unique penning. You've taken a slighly different tack and I do like it indeed!!!
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      I woulda dropped the "-ship" But other than that, Wonderful work, Krys!!

    [[and btw I loved the end]]

    Carrie
    | Posted on 2009-07-24 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      ..krystle didnt write a description for this poem, so i will. These are the first thoughts on soulmates that krystle put together for a best friends tatoo that we are getting. there is no ending. this was just a beginning. since its going 2 be a tatoo, our goal is to take our best ideas and combine them into a much smaller verse. this is a very short poem itself, but it says a million things...if you read between the lines.
    but i will say, that at this point (to me) our goal is far from accomplished, we want the poem 2 say twice as much, yet be half the lenght.
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by PO3TiKPO1SON | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought the ending was week, it doesnt keep it in your mind afterwards, more like it just repeats the title. ASide from that I did thing there were some decent parts, relation-ship for instance, it isnt something that floors the reader, but thought it was a nice touch that could draw them in. You are the best judge of your own work of course.

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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