Synergy

Author: was_i_ever_real ASL Info:    23 _ f _ tx Elite Ratio:    8 - 194 /91 /52 Words: 49

Class/Type: Poetry /Love Total Views: 1030 Average Vote:    4.5000 Bytes: 415

Description:

---

Synergy

---

We are Cold Rhythm and Fiery Beat Creating silent Harmony, beautiful simplicity reacting on a loyalty beyond accepted interpretation... Destined from creation an enigmatic relation-ship We are Elements stripped to the most lucid form- Born as one, but torn A paradoxal same We are twin flames.

Submitted on 2009-06-01 13:18:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_< 2: I dunno... 3: meh! 4: Pretty cool 5: Wow!

Comments

My evil subconscious will probably want to steal some of these images at some point in the future, so I'll call them haunting, cold and hot flames, describes music indeed!

| Posted on 2010-07-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

A relationship poem-- this is intriguing and a unique penning. You've taken a slighly different tack and I do like it indeed!!!

| Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

I woulda dropped the "-ship" But other than that, Wonderful work, Krys!! [[and btw I loved the end]] Carrie

| Posted on 2009-07-24 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]

..krystle didnt write a description for this poem, so i will. These are the first thoughts on soulmates that krystle put together for a best friends tatoo that we are getting. there is no ending. this was just a beginning. since its going 2 be a tatoo, our goal is to take our best ideas and combine them into a much smaller verse. this is a very short poem itself, but it says a million things...if you read between the lines. but i will say, that at this point (to me) our goal is far from accomplished, we want the poem 2 say twice as much, yet be half the lenght.

| Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by PO3TiKPO1SON | [ Reply to This ]

I thought the ending was week, it doesnt keep it in your mind afterwards, more like it just repeats the title. ASide from that I did thing there were some decent parts, relation-ship for instance, it isnt something that floors the reader, but thought it was a nice touch that could draw them in. You are the best judge of your own work of course. -Craig

| Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest. 2. Try not to give only compliments. 3. How did it make you feel? 4. Why did it make you feel that way? 5. Which parts? 6. What distracted from the piece?

7. What was unclear? 8. What does it remind you of? 9. How could it be improved? 10. What would you have done differently? 11. What was your interpretation of it? 12. Does it feel original?

175045