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    dots Submission Name: goodbye silly girl dots

    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/55
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       last few minutes with my bfffl before she got back on that plane to go to other side of the us :( good times but sad

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    dotsgoodbye silly girl dots

    sitting on the pavenment
    smoking out lasts ciggarettes
    reminising on the old times
    and predicting the new

    laughing at our immaturaties
    and obstecles overcome
    mending all our fall outs
    retracing all our fun

    sitting in the silence
    of what we new was soon to end
    not caring about having nothing to say
    dancing on the thought of meeting again

    planning our next moves
    and events that were soon to begin
    procrastinating our goodbyes
    holding in tears that i knew would have no end

    there wasnt enough time
    but it was better then not seeing you at all
    both have changed for the better
    we will catch up with every call

    being here without my friend is harder then i thought
    but knowing that i have a friend like you is something that cant be bought
    the lessons we have learned are ones that cant be taught
    all the stupid things we have done wont be forgot

    Submitted on 2009-06-01 14:09:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aw a true friendship can survive anything, and that's what you showed in this piece. I like the way you showed how it feels to see your friend leave and explained it in so little words.

    This reminds me of a time with my best friend and how it was while we were growing up.

    Thanks for writing something that reminded me of those good times.

    | Posted on 2009-06-07 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is at some point true for everyone i think... i loved it... i hate to say goodbye to people who have forever carved themselves it your life... you wrote this perfectly... i felt like i was there and could taste the cigarett and smell the smoke...bravo once again
    | Posted on 2009-06-05 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagery was fantastic, the emotion jumped off the screen, but the flow was a bit off. Mostly due to the last stanza. It didn't match. But this was lovely. I've been here before. Just recently. It's hard but good.
    Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

    | Posted on 2009-06-04 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      my goodness... I'm the 9th person to view this and yet I'm the first person to comment... their crazy b/c this was an amazing write. I could see everything you were writing i can see its heartfelt.. keep up the good writes

    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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