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    dots Submission Name: Deeply loveddots

    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDeeply loveddots

    I love it when you look into my eyes and whisper I love you, And when you pull me close and passonatly kiss me,
    I melt into your arms,
    Feeling your body,
    Your touch,
    feeling safe as you hold me,
    Knowing that this is true love,
    That not everyone finds,
    But I will never let it go,
    I love how deeply you are into me,
    And how we can kiss for hours and hold each other forever and never want to let go,
    I love the fact you love me,
    And you choose me over every one else,
    And how you mean so much to me,
    And I love loving you,
    Each day and every moment that we have together,
    It gets better and beter.

    Submitted on 2009-06-01 16:48:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Everyone loves love.
    This poem is a very sweet poem, and it has a really good rhythm to it. I wish I had someone like this in my life, but soon enough I'm sure I will. Everyone deserves someone like this in their life, no matter what they've done. It just makes everyone's life complete. <3

    Nice poem!


    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by smexybabe0101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very intense and very passionate. Your verse presents the mood of young love, and is a delight to all who have been in love.

    Aaah, love. Nothing like it, and where would we poets be without it?
    | Posted on 2009-06-22 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      nice write! i really have nothing else to say, i think its fine the was it is .

    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      i felt like that a few months ago and now its been almost two years with the one i loved...i just don't want you to get hurt...be careful...but this is an awesome write and i could feel your emotion...it made me smile...keep goin with it...
    - ash
    | Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]

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