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    dots Submission Name: anyone out there....dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 398
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsanyone out there....dots
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    i wish someone
    anyone
    would take me away
    save me from this hell
    love me
    fuck me
    never leave me
    care for me
    be there when i need them most
    i want a lover
    who'll be true
    who won't yell and scream
    i want to be loved
    for whom i am
    i'm beautiful
    maybe not a size 2
    but attractive
    my eyes change colors
    i'm clever and witty
    isn't there anyone out there
    crazy enough
    to love me?




    Submitted on 2009-06-01 20:31:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the ending. -->

    "my eyes change colors
    i'm clever and witty
    isn't there anyone out there
    crazy enough
    to love me?"

    It's exactly like me, and I ask the same thing...Only...I think I've found people crazy enough to love me...but...I don't really feel the same...I think that's worse.

    Unlike the other person who commented, I enjoy the straight-forward nature of things, but she is right--many people feel the same way. I do. And, yes, from time to time, ambiguity would be nice. However, I say, [censored] it. Write what you want, how you want, when you want, but make sure to heed advice. It's very helpful. Trust me. I've had many comments that helped me out. :)

    -Mojy-
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by mojymo | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that many people out there feel the same way, no worries though you'll find someone who loves you for you.
    as for the poem its much too clear, i like to read things with ambiguity. but its a good write.

    Fana
    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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