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    dots Submission Name: a slip and a spill...dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 327
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa slip and a spill...dots
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    i can't stop
    this downward spiral
    my paper airplane
    caught in the storm
    of your betrayal
    crashing to the ground
    where lightening strikes
    a kick to the ribs
    just a wimpering dog
    as you tower above
    screaming your filth
    till i drown
    covered in blood
    from ten thousand cuts
    self inflicted
    for release
    my heart long numb
    to the one i once cared for
    so much to give my life
    now a constant reminder
    this stinging pain
    of how badly you hurt me
    enough to defy a vow
    never again i promised
    but a slip and a spill
    once again addicted
    a blood lust
    i can't control
    crazy i must be
    but when it hurt so much inside
    you want to carve your viens out
    not to die
    never for death
    to just make the inturnal stop
    to feel something
    anything to fill this void
    pain
    a thousand times a thousand strong
    so much better then this
    lost and alone
    sufficating in full view of the publlic
    these sheep so unaware
    stitches won't seal these wounds
    they're straight from the soul
    a barren forgotten place
    why do i hold on
    i'm a walking corpse
    looking for love
    six feet under myself doubt
    no savior in sight
    take me away
    angel of death
    so i may finally rest
    and sleep with no torment
    forever in nothingness
    without anyone here
    holding my head under this liquid
    my own life force
    thick with greed and lust
    warm like the hug
    i need so very much right now
    pick me up of the floor
    angel dressed in black
    cradle my wrists
    lick my blood and tears away
    save me from myself
    and this abusive lover
    i want so badly to be nothing
    thats all i am
    an empty shell
    of what i once was
    and never again will be
    someone come along
    and push that extra milimeter
    i don't have the balls to do it
    set me free...




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