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    dots Submission Name: Moon Cheese on Ritz Crackersdots
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    Author: SammySueYou
    ASL Info:    23/f/nm
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 90/78/30
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 733
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    Description:
       I wrote this after a dream I had


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    dotsMoon Cheese on Ritz Crackersdots
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    For just one night let us forget,
    no more doubts and certainly no regret.
    Let me take you for a ride,
    on the twinkle in my eye.
    Let our only evidence be the stardust that resides.
    I can show you things to make your heart skip a beat,
    beyond any big cities nor fatally ferrocious heat.
    We can lie on the moon, and eat moon cheese with rits crackers,
    I can show you how to touch my keypad in ways unlike a hacker.
    We can surf orions belt on an enormous turtles shell,
    up on mars which is coloured much like what we think of hell.
    Nothing beats a picnic on a psychedelic moon beam,
    the only thing that does is meeting you inside my dream.
    Let's watch cartoons, or even cuddle up together,
    my love for you is strong unlike a torn up love letter.
    Do you recall your childhood at all?
    my imagination was lucid, and infinity feet tall.
    I thought that I had imagined every magical thing I could make,
    but that was only until you made my heart beat again in a way much like an earthquake...
    I am alive, more than I have ever been before,
    I was happy when I met you and I could never ask for more...




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