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    dots Submission Name: Fireproofdots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsFireproofdots
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    I am not invulnerable,
    Because I am miserable,
    But hold this true,
    That if it weren't for the fire,
    Then I would not be fireproof,

    I may be hurting,
    I may be aching,
    But if it were not for the flames,
    Then all would be the same,

    Mediocracy and ease helps no one,
    Laziness benefits none,
    But it is whe yo are tried through the fire,
    That you come out even higher,

    Now the intesity of the heat,
    Is up to you and me,
    But you can hold this fact to be true,
    If it weren't for the fire,
    Then we would not be fireproof.




    Submitted on 2009-06-04 17:56:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this makes me think that of that saying...what doesnt kill you simply makes you stronger. i think thats the message that you were trying to get across. at least thats what i got from it. i liked it!! sweet work.
    *Joez*
    | Posted on 2009-06-29 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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