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    dots Submission Name: 12 Gauge Shot Gundots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 549
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    Description:
       Depression has a mind of it own...I suppose i'm here for a reason... although I'm trying to figure that reason out still....

    Its been a while since I've written please give me your feedback


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    dots12 Gauge Shot Gundots
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    This 12 gauge shot gun was meant to kill me
    What the hell happened?

    Stuck in the ER for a month
    Then soon having a nurse's assistance at home.

    Disgusted, I break all the mirrors
    My future husband and I split

    The 12 gauge shot gun was meant to kill me
    Instead... I was revived...

    SAVED

    But for WHAT
    I ask you?

    To live in this hell on Earth?




    Submitted on 2009-06-05 01:58:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You were saved for a very good reason; God wants you on this earth and has a plan which you are a part of (I'm not religious by the way, just have experienced many of God's miracles).

    Just think, you are the only person who will ever walk this earth throught all eternity who is exactly like you, and who has your exact make up, talent, and skills!

    Great compassion, wisdom, and understanding is given only to those who have first suffered greatly. Your pain and suffering was not in vain, but will give rise to far greater things!
    | Posted on 2009-06-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very powerful... I've never gone so far as to actually try and end my life, but I've certainly thought about it and I always ask myself what I'm even here for. What's the point? I think we can all relate, and I'm glad you shared this with us.
    | Posted on 2009-06-05 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was short but sweet. I honestly enjoyed this. For I've found myself in the same situation time and time again. I've pointed an Ithica to my face countless times. Though the thing that always stopped me was my grandfathers ole saying. Its and Irish saying that goes way back... "There is an endless amount of hope in the sea, but none in the grave." Those words always haulted my actions. I've come to realize that death isn't the answer to anything cause if you do that there is no chance to fix it or make it better. Again nice work, keep it going! I'm glad to find someone that isn't afraid to express their feelings, even if they're ones that others are uncomfortable with. Ohh and I guess we have a little more in common too. I too am inlisting myself into a military branch. I'm trying to get into the Marine Corps. Good luck with your journey. Strive, survive, and live!
    Dominique
    | Posted on 2009-06-05 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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