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    dots Submission Name: under the weather with lettersdots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/258
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 50
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    Bytes: 614



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    dotsunder the weather with lettersdots
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    im under his thumb
    im under the weather
    the wind is killing me
    just like his letters.
    they come once a week
    they tell me of his depression
    of his heartache
    and mostly of his missing me.
    they dont stop
    and i wish they would
    this war is costing me way to much
    my freedom is gone, and turnt to dust.
    he always told me i was free to leave
    but what a lie
    as i wait for each letter
    to make their way to me.
    they keep me trapped
    they keep me down
    im under his thumb
    im under the weather.,




    Submitted on 2009-06-05 12:45:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi, very good write. poe
    | Posted on 2009-06-06 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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