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    dots Submission Name: America's Got Talent. dots

    Author: Aaron Felix
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 162/183/93
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAmerica's Got Talent. dots

    The trophy is itself a fluttering
    incomprehensible object of
    jealous runners-up. The jitterbug
    is a dance we all did once
    without competing. Such is love,
    oft found in one form equal as
    the next, a contest that never
    ends, a hapless foot-spasm
    that makes a wealth of rhythm
    on grain wood, a conscious howling
    of all that we think is misunderstood
    but's got down just right.

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      but's got down just right.

    I don't see what you gain from 'but's' it's awkward.

    Other than that, it's a meat and potatoes poem, gets the job done and that's pleasing to see.
    | Posted on 2009-06-07 00:00:00 | by BrokeArtGallery | [ Reply to This ]
      You have been watching too much dancing with the stars. But I agree with you whole heartedly, cable sucks!!!!

    I liked how you just jumped into it and said what you really felt...the poetic voice came naturally in doing such, which tells me, you really are a poet and not just someone that fancies themself as such.

    Nice work!

    | Posted on 2009-06-06 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      Theres nothing strange about being cynical about americas got talent. I love ow the ones with the most depressing sob story go farthest, or the biggest freaks, Susan whatever her name is, I could go on for a whole essay. Its just a circus, I dont really like the circus, but it can be amusing.

    Whatever anyhow, I liked this, the way you put it, its like going to a public execution in a way.

    | Posted on 2009-06-06 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      I still wonder how you manage to make something so pleasant to read while also sounding strangely cynical. I love it.
    | Posted on 2009-06-06 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]

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