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    dots Submission Name: Survivedots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSurvivedots
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    Survive

    Hold fast,
    Stand strong,
    Last,
    Or you won't stand for long,

    Heroes fail,
    And villains reign,
    Survive the hail,
    If you wanna see freedom again,

    Live long,
    And endure,
    For when are all alone,
    I'm there, this you can be sure,

    So survive, hold out against the strife,
    Or the demons and devils will take thy life.




    Submitted on 2009-06-06 17:43:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm. I liked the rythym. You seem to be writing to music. The fast pace and spacing supports the message. You definitely know what you're doing.

    I don't know what else to say. Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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