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    dots Submission Name: late at nightdots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 685
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotslate at nightdots
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    when i look into his eyes
    i can see my futchure
    i see the woman i want to be
    and i know he will be there
    to follow me threw
    he would stand behind me
    in whatever i choose to do
    hes the love of my life
    and i would never leave his side
    we are getting our own place soon
    i am so excited
    i feel like a child again
    there is no one elses arms
    i would rather be in
    when the lights turn off at night
    i just hope he knows
    just how much
    i do truely love him




    Submitted on 2009-06-06 18:54:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Simple beauty is the best way to describe this poem. No snazzy words or unrelatable metaphors. Its a poem and its driven heavily by its emotion. Its a poem that people can remmeber the "spirit" of.

    Good write.
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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