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    dots Submission Name: Spring has sprungdots
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    Author: firedragon
    ASL Info:    17/F/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 2/1/1
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 708



    Description:
       I've never felt so happy, from now on I'm a new person! a better person!


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    dotsSpring has sprungdots
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    Spring is here

    I feel the rain

    I see your smiles

    I feel no pain

    Spring is here

    Itís time to take part

    Look at the scenes

    Maybe make some art

    Spring is here

    I know itís true

    When Iím by myself

    I no longer feel blue

    Spring is here!

    There is nothing you can do

    My life hasnít been better

    Now that Iím not with you

    Spring is here

    Happiness surrounds me

    As I lay in the colors

    Finally able to truly be

    me




    Submitted on 2009-06-07 09:59:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The scheme was quite weak, but given you haven't submited anything else, It's not bad at all.

    Very upbeat choice of words of iffy in places but overall a valiant effort, and a good positive image rather then the teen angst crap that everyone puts up here.
    | Posted on 2009-06-07 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]


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