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    dots Submission Name: Little Sister You Seedots
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    Author: Amisi
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 524
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLittle Sister You Seedots
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    She is small
    She is cute
    She is adorable to boot

    She gives a cuddle
    She gives a kiss
    There is nothing I want to miss.

    As smile touches her lips
    She puts her hands on her hips
    She’s a little sister you see
    And that’s what she is to me

    She giggles
    She spies
    With deep chocolate brown eyes

    Her secrets
    She’ll share
    To all of those who care

    A giggle touches her lips
    She puts her hands on her hips
    She’s a little sister you see
    That’s what she is to me.

    She sleeps
    With no sound
    As she tosses around

    She wakes
    With a smile
    Making my heart beat a mile

    A sigh touches her lips
    She puts her hands on her hips
    She’s a little sister you see
    That’s what she is to me.




    Submitted on 2009-06-07 15:18:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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