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    dots Submission Name: Give me poetry feverdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGive me poetry feverdots
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    Dry as a mornings tongue
    at waking awareness
    is my poetry
    Wordplay amnesia
    have I had.

    Whilst I have been gallavanting
    the uncharted maps
    of my soul
    I have fallen into its beauty
    and forgotten its language.

    Muddle me through this verse
    now
    in pursuit of former-style formulations.
    Clasp me into the bosom of creation
    and burst me forth.
    Like a sneeze.
    Spraying glisten glitters.

    Give me poetry fever
    in a sweat
    let it run out of me
    like pear juice flows when
    bitten with berry-reds.
    Sweet and sticky
    and delightfully delicious.

    Yum!




    Submitted on 2009-06-07 17:24:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whilst I have been gallavanting
    the uncharted maps
    of my soul
    I have fallen into its beauty
    and forgotten its language.

    I know this feeling well, it's the complacency that comes from living with no questions or conflict. And as much as I like to enjoy life, it doesn't do thing for writing, at least for me.

    A piece of sand has to land inside and make me turn out the pearl. Nice work, Kate, i really like every line and thought.

    Love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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