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    dots Submission Name: My baby sleeps sodots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy baby sleeps sodots
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    Soft snuffles
    in and out.
    Scrunched, hunched
    foetal-like.
    Furled and curled with
    arms and legs tucked
    and juxtaposed to me.
    Head, olympic swimmer sideways;

    For air.

    My baby sleeps so.





    Submitted on 2009-06-07 17:53:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Make the most of the peace you get while your baby sleeps....hahahaha.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2015-06-28 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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