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    dots Submission Name: Nature Ages Gracefullydots
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    Author: Cloacina
    ASL Info:    25/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    5.24 - 20/53/54
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Misc/Nature
    Total Views: 518
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 566



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    dotsNature Ages Gracefullydots
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    Nature,
    ages gracefully.
    Fingertips drag lightly across sandstone.
    I pretend they are bare witch's feet
    on a low flying broom.
    The tickle dissolves
    into a delicate burn.
    They stumble in the holes,
    wind and water
    have patiently carved,
    disrupting a cavern of nuts.
    The lines create elegant contours,
    while holes lend interest,
    a unique beauty,
    a place to store
    the practical
    and aesthetic.
    Human beings don't degrade
    so handsomely.




    Submitted on 2009-06-07 19:06:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn! I liked this!

    Thought it was really original and loved your use of words. Cliche-free and a pleasure to read.

    "Fingertips drag lightly across sandstone" was awesome.

    Yep, I could really learn from a piece like this.

    Cheers!
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]


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