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    dots Submission Name: im ashameddots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/257
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 84
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    before he left
    i promised him
    i'd be there when he returned
    So i waited at the gate
    for him
    holding my breathe
    afraid of what he would say to me
    five months pregnant
    with another mans child
    and he doesnt know
    I watch him make his way down the hall
    looking tall and proud in his uniform
    i watch his eyes looking for me
    i watch his eyes as he finds me
    First the shock
    then surprise
    now the anger, is in his eyes
    im ashamed
    because i couldnt tell him
    and i still dont know what to say
    he walks up to me
    and just looks at my stomach
    "well, when were you going to tell me?"
    i just close my eyes
    and take a deep breathe
    as the tears fall from my eyes
    im sorry i say
    but were no longer together
    and i see the sun an moon in his eyes
    i give him a hug
    then walk away
    i cant turn around
    because im afraid
    im afraid ill see him cry
    and that will kill me inside.




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