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    dots Submission Name: Don't leavedots
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    Author: EEKS
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    dotsDon't leavedots
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    I've bought a lot of coffee in my life
    Wrote love songs with broken rhymes
    And I was never the right girl coming at the right time
    I never put any flowers in my hair
    And I'm not oh so sorry, I think I did all right mostly
    But there is one thing I can't help but regret

    So next time you leave I will beg you not to go
    I will put on our favorite love songs
    and I will hold you so close you can't breathe without me
    And I'll ask you not to leave

    When it comes to you, I dont have the pride I used to
    I sketch your face in pencil and hope you aren't forgetting how my chin curves into my lips
    and how mine and yours used to fit

    You are climbing rocks and I am catching stars
    And I know you're doing good but I wish you hadn't went so far
    I need you too keep me
    Don't leave again




    Submitted on 2009-06-08 01:04:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...

    this one spoke to my soul,
    probably because how it is written reminds me of how I feel and what I'm going through at the moment...

    Keep on being you, beautiful snow flower, because the world really needs more people like you, love.

    ~Rose
    | Posted on 2009-07-02 00:00:00 | by Queen_of_spades | [ Reply to This ]


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