it is good.
i would only change one thing...
"i try speak out
but nothing comes about"
but really it is good.
poetry doesnt have to have rythme scheme.
but if you do try to use the same rythme scheme throughout the entire peom.
but im not putting your work down.in fact,im trying to make it better because you have talent.so take it to heart.
Well unfinished or not. It still seems coming from the heart. And that's good. It brings back memorys what are not far away from me. I now how you feel. Trust me. But eventually it all changed for me. I started looking everything at the bright side and one day I wasn't alone no more. I just wish the same for you.
This just poem captured the feelings and said all. Speechless. Made me speechless. This means good, i now ;).