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    dots Submission Name: Writing exercisedots
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    Author: joeyalphabet
    ASL Info:    48/not likely/somewhere..
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 2185/2170/423
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 105
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    A little exercise to limber up the fingers. Past prologue is present imperfect, or if you like, future-fried. Do you want to hear a little sea shanty? I want to turn into a kite. The stream has left me, I’m only crumbs. A little protest of musical notes tells me I've found the nest. Wanting to leave doesn’t mean you ever will. The ties that bind – around my neck, slowly, ever so slowly tightening. A dire situation demands a drastic response, or none at all. A leaf lives only four months, a butterfly four weeks, my heart only four seconds. Diamonds cut me, a stream of red dances down the hill and flowers bloom in its wake. Lightning flashes, but no rain falls from heavy clouds. Miners live in fear of collapses that will suffocate them. Hammers hunt nails. Shoot a rocket through space, dive into the atmosphere and burn up, leaving a disappointed wish behind. Only the tiniest animals lived through the colossal destruction the comet wrought sixty-five million years ago, only those who hid survived. A firefly lights the dark; he doesn’t curse it, he’s just searching for a mate. Children salute the flag, never comprehending her red means blood, with no telling trace left behind in the soil. Shit is food for many animals. Death is food for life. Perhaps a smidgen of salt? Wilting flowers tell the time. Divide and conquer, unify and conquer. The disillusionment of endings, the dissolution of days.




    Submitted on 2009-06-08 12:43:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel like you could play drums to this or put a beat to it or something, its just like pow pow pow pow pow, constant. I like it though. Whatever you did works, I think its the constant commas and long sentences and birage after birage of descriptors. Very stilish.

    Anyways very good write here man. I want to say more but I am about to pass out.
    | Posted on 2009-07-26 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]
      This is dense. I hear the likes of Rimbaud and beat poets. But not to say that it isnt original, the voice of it belongs to you. I loved the random shots of apathy and constant tome of vulgar. Melancholic, i think, runs somewhere deep below the words. I love this. Reminds me somewhat of Bob Dylan's Tarantula.
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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