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    dots Submission Name: I fear I have lost it.dots
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    Author: brokensmile
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    dots I fear I have lost it.dots
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    What has left me.

    Because I do not need the kind of hope
    I actively wrote.

    Once I created.
    I wasnít anything but a pen
    But I had the workings of ink

    And now I have nothing
    But repetitive things
    That relieve little
    Because my sadness has been pinched
    It devours a quarter of what it once had

    But I am nearer to what I wanted then

    So what have I lost

    With the gains of being away
    And set free

    I get these weeks
    Of residual feeling

    The last traces of my communication
    Dripping into pictures
    That draw themselves

    Into dates and summaries
    Under the format
    Of a grade

    And I am lost
    In a heightened mood
    Smiling at consistency
    While I have established love



    Enduring the pinpricks
    Of weakening flaws

    Doing what never appealed to me
    Completing time frames
    Deadlines
    Schedules

    And I am active

    But I have lost something

    I am dry of ink
    I am dry of blood

    The rush is gone
    The euphoria
    The long term I had
    Is replaced by the long term I have

    So what is it that I have lost

    When for all of those years

    it was the only thing that I could call myself.




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