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    dots Submission Name: Unexpecteddots
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    Author: Shadowstar13
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 191/191/129
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 580
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2027



    Description:
       Starts out graphic; hear me out, alright?
    Started as a sketch I wanted to draw; ended like this.
    Some made-up words and puns in here...all intentional,; I assure you.


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    dotsUnexpecteddots
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    Some things are unforeseeable
    No omens given; no one warned;
    Some things you never expect to show
    You don't see the skeletons till the closet's swarmed

    The cheerleader's holding a skull today
    A baby sliced open his dog
    A savior convicted of moral decay
    An angel with the heart of a hog

    When they start shedding skins again
    Don't you look at me:
    I'll count to twelve, strike once, and then
    Your vertigo they'll see

    Perched on this edge of the grotesque
    Who wouldn't want to jump?
    Schnadenfreude; how arabesque
    Twisted and voyeuristic; this is what goes "bump"

    A grandfatherly man serving partial lobotomy
    The bus passenger with a forbidden taste
    A choir lady obssessed with most morbid dichotomy
    A priest in archaia most unchaste

    Yet in this coil you'll never see
    The sudden loop it takes;
    Skeletons unlocked sometimes set souls free
    Triskadekagoraphobia an unworthy pho makes

    The punk lounging on the corner helps a dame across the street
    A raging child ceases screaming to aid a mother in need;
    Main Street's leading hooker stops an assault on an elite
    A garden-variety psychotic gets a cellmate off of weed

    So few and twice as far between
    These happenstances of sympathy
    Yet more fresh milk gone acid the pantry's seen
    Than crocodiles with true empathy

    The patient talks the jumper down while disposing of her meds
    That boy in chains and eyeliner fixes a leaking pipe with tape
    A miser sees a former self and gives away his Keds
    The girl with dyed hair and death-heads on prevents a stoner's rape

    You say the things that shock you most traffick in drugs and gore,
    But I'd bet my last breath that the crocs surprise you more.




    Submitted on 2009-06-08 17:19:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The bottom line here is as I decipher the parables, which to my mind are dimensions
    on various depths of the Rainbow frequencies, that to me represent a scale perpetually changing as Time that Is Not, escalates in harmony amongst our most deepest emotions, in a subtle Way not always deemed there or necessary. I really love your deep thought in happenings around you. Luv u. Blessed Be. Jm.
    | Posted on 2009-06-09 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      Merry Meet. Goodness Gracious me! Well really unexpected I must say. After I have studied a dictionary of various calibre’s, took some course or other, I might be able to comment. Good show thought. Blessed Be, JM
    | Posted on 2009-06-09 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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