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    dots Submission Name: See the Empty Spacedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSee the Empty Spacedots

    See the Empty Space

    The sorrow leaves a pool
    Dripped in pages to the floor

    A sideways glance is thinking
    It does not want to see you anymore

    Gliding over the tiles lingers on their cold
    Searching secret niches to hide behind they’re cracking

    And the sorrow leaves its pool
    Sliding message bear traps springing closed

    Nothing but a silence staining a polished surface
    A reflection no one knows

    It seeps from beneath the glances
    That have no where else to rest

    It hides behind your eyelids
    In the place it knows the best

    As the sorrow pool spreads with its counted motion
    Its testament shed within the howling drips

    Reaches to a mirror
    But does not want to see you anymore

    The bawling engines roar
    A plane crash falling weight of your capture

    While diamond pith shatters into tissue
    With the unspoken vowels of love

    But gliding over the floor
    The silence of sorrows pool

    No one can hear the unspoken words
    But everyone sees the smiles

    They don’t feel the day is dead
    Or see the empty space

    They do not recognise the shadow
    Which lynches on the corner of your mouth

    They cannot see the eyes
    Into which yours still long to look

    Only clues of something stirring
    In the quietness of your voice

    And the paper trail is littered with your silence
    Dripped in pages to the floor

    The sorrow leaves a pool
    Floats away across the tiles
    Skimming an unbroken sheen upon the chill
    Floats away across the tiles

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