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    dots Submission Name: The Desertdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    dotsThe Desertdots
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    The Desert

    Flat pit
    Sands wings of want
    Devour ( mesmerisms haunts )

    Nothing but their desire
    Scourges

    No horizons
    Empty skies
    All with out meaning
    Sit ( still carousel )
    On want

    Flat pit
    Quicksand’s
    Swallow

    The dust of its need
    Fills ( slow flash flood )
    Grows
    Touches nothing
    Coughs and chokes
    A feeling

    Only want
    With more to its cause
    Shivering in hot blood
    To the core
    Spilled
    Open ( laying naked enclosed )

    Flat pit
    Digs
    Screeching moron
    Scavenges

    Empty laughter pulpit
    The hugs of love
    But want

    Always want
    Emptied to want
    The flat pit
    Falls
    On want



    The desert
    Crawls the swimming sand
    This water falls ( desiccant )

    Dry







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