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    dots Submission Name: Castlesdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
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    dotsCastlesdots
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    Castles


    Not
    Any
    More

    Me

    Faded; where did I go………….

    I built love on wishes

    Papier-mâché castles of glitter dusted

    Crumpled to the paper bags they were made from

    Where dreams inspired my heart with empty air

    Not
    Me
    Any

    More

    The wave swept shore has returned my sandcastles to grains

    My soul a mere beach where my spirit played

    Only marks my passing in the foot prints of today

    A shadow fleeting on the rippled sand

    Not
    Any
    More

    Me

    Time has pulled the great stone flags flint to disarray

    Tumbled in spaces where the blue sky is seen

    My great grand castles built on dreams

    Stand monument to the tomfoolery of my hearts mastery

    Not
    Me
    Any
    More

    Faded; where did I go……………..














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