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    dots Submission Name: Broken Archdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsBroken Archdots
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    Broken Arch


    The will of unfettered Moors it was
    Broke scattered amidst the hoary stems
    Ancient snow-white reeds they were
    Their bending heads
    Dismal conductors
    To the rank and rattle
    Of thundering skies

    To the awkward sonnet of winging geese
    She bent her head
    Tears of heaven
    In brunette braided rivulets
    Cling their sodden threads
    Forlorn
    Of white cotton summer dress

    And by the broken arch
    Where once the temple of kisses she met
    She sought to rest
    But no sanctuary there
    From the stammered storm of her wintered heart
    She bleeds her sorrow
    Into an empty cup

    The boys have gone a marching
    Down to the port
    Where the robbing waves
    Were gathering their steal
    In rank and file
    To beat out the drum of never more
    And return afloat on splintered wood
    Those heroes now of battles field

    Nothing now
    Save the cold kiss of stone
    In the fallen grandeur of an ancient church
    Nothing now
    But the rain filled font
    And the alter of sacrificed love
    Nothing but the old twist of Ivy
    To grip an hold her still

    And the dark lonely will
    Of the unfettered Moor
    Hears between the cracks and tombs
    Another anguished wail
    To scratch the laden clouds












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