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    dots Submission Name: The Balking Mire of Fanghandrathdots

    Author: col13x
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    dotsThe Balking Mire of Fanghandrathdots

    The Balking Mire of Fanghandrath

    ‘Twas late when the misted veils
    Suck and drew
    ‘pon the reeking fetters of claxon screams
    Wailing echoed dismal to

    Too late for lantern to pick a path
    In the trickster passages
    Of the boggish marsh
    The Balking Mires of Fanghandrath

    Where ‘oer the shake-ed sheaves domain
    The Shadow Hunter was know to claim
    The souls of less fortune given men
    Or the eyes of the innocent

    Aye ! They told the story well
    Should the hunter of shadows
    ‘pon your path befall
    would devour all in The Balking Mires of Fanghandrath

    But needs must some they need
    To prove their bravery
    Of foolish men never seen again
    Returning from the trickster paths of Fanghandrath

    Of one such a man who’s courage by beer
    Was made stalwart young and without fear
    Through the haunted waste he dared to travel
    When the misted veils suck and drew

    Not yet half way there before the chill ate his bones
    And from the rear the rushing fear
    Did The Shadow Hunter draw ‘pon his heart
    In noisome fog the Rake appeared

    Too far to hear the sounds of screams
    Too lost in the mazes of dead beaten reeds
    To mouth-less to utter a prayer
    And beseech the fate of balking mires

    No wind it was the laugh, the laugh of Fanghandrath
    The hunger of its desolate seed
    To feed ‘pon the soul
    Of innocent and less fortune given men

    ‘Twas not till dawn when he reached the rim
    Ashen grey his youth had gone
    And no shadow did he cast in morning sun
    No shadow ever falls
    On The Balking Mires of Fanghandrath

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