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    dots Submission Name: Great Nationdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 394
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGreat Nationdots

    Great Nation

    How our eyes have since turned to you
    Prayed for your magnificent and proud banner
    Its promise of liberty and freedom
    Equality for all within its great nation

    The saviours who came to defended life with life
    In the defence of our freedoms
    How the world owed such a debt of honour
    To the sacrifices made by such a courageous people

    Those were the times of indomitable old glory
    When liberties torch burned bright for the entire world to see

    How then did this undoubted pride fall to paranoia and fear
    In such a vast land so brave and so free
    Did the foundations of the great nations dream
    Then feel so rickety

    Did they rest all to unsteadily
    On the human slaughtered red native skins
    Or slip on the blood black peoples backs of slavery
    Perhaps all the empty barrels of whale oil sent you tumbling

    Did they become a sickness in your heart
    Branded by burning crosses and one time apartheid
    Born of racial supremacy and the idiocy of ethnic hate
    Or was it some fanaticism of a religious elite

    Is it now birthed in the guns that roam your streets
    Forgotten and hidden in the trash alleys of capitalism
    Supped on by the poor quivering mouths of soup kitchens
    Dieing on the lips of uneducated children

    Sweating on the brows of three dollars an hour Mexicans
    While your foot print was placed on the moon
    Could the Negro celebrate under its boot
    Can the Indian reclaim the land that was once theirs

    Great Nation your voice once rang out to up lift the world
    But now dies in the eyes of so many new drugs
    Painting the lie of it all in a camera tricks celluloid
    All glitter and glitz ticker tape parade antics

    Great Nation how our eyes have since turned to you
    Searching for every promise you made to the world
    Now lost in the unseen barbed wire of defended boarders
    It was such a vast land so brave and so free

    How then did your undoubted pride fall to paranoia and fear
    It was such a vast land so brave and so free
    How did the foundations of such a great nations dream
    Then feel so rickety

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      WOW... so much emotion... all of it flows nicely together. I have to admit i especially enjoyed this piece. For the fact that I am going into the navy. Have a lot of thoughts on my mind. but this just puts me into more of a deeper thought. I loved it keep posting

    | Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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