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    dots Submission Name: lessonsdots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Think of a better title.

    'Cause I can't.


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    dotslessonsdots
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    No one taught me any important lessons,
    growing up.

    Like how never to throw away unopened envelopes
    because they might contain
    hopes waiting to be realized,
    someone else's memories,
    or even something as mundane as money

    Or why I shouldn't be wishing on stars
    (because they crash, and
    because they're really just giant gasballs
    but mainly because wishes don't come true)

    No one mentioned anything about the importance of sunblock,
    or braces
    or spoke of the inherent, ultimate solitariness of the soul
    one can never hope to outgrow

    But the most important lesson I never learnt
    even now,
    is not to fall in love with you.




    Submitted on 2009-06-09 00:42:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There's nothing wrong with the title. Like the comparisons too. The 'lessons' may seem to be unrelated to the main point at the end, but the lead in to it was well written.
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]
      Good Write, Plenty of wonderful examples suporting the title, I LOVE the stanza about wishing stars. Very Relatable.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2009-06-10 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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