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    dots Submission Name: Prisonerdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsPrisonerdots
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    You are my prisoner
    As I am yours

    Yet we hold each others key's within ourselves.
    A key to unlock this hellish prison we built for one another
    (and simply keep building on)

    But we do not DARE share these keys
    For if we did
    We risk loosing one another
    To this fast pace and crazy world

    Yet if we stay on this same path...
    My destructive way will only wear you down to practically NOTHING.
    Your depression will only put me into a deeper darker whole.

    So what are left with?
    A shitting hand of life,
    dealt to us that we did not ask for.




    Submitted on 2009-06-09 02:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is beautiful !!

    It vibrates a true symphony of how difficult it is to maintain a relationship.

    But the best part was 'You are my prisoner
    As I am yours'

    It ended a bit early though. I was thinking of getting a more elaborate view.

    regards,
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]
      I love you right now you know that, I mean i've been dying to read something along these lines for a really long time. It's terribly sweet and i'm crying cause i was thinking about someone while reading it, if that makes sense.

    your really truly awesome in this one
    kevin
    | Posted on 2009-06-25 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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