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    dots Submission Name: One Life To Losedots
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    Author: silverpen
    ASL Info:    16/F/Right Behind You
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 16/34/31
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 62
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1108



    Description:
       In memory of all the baby animals that shelter's couldn't save, were never found, or had to be euthanized. This subject is the one that hits me the hardest so I thought I would express some of the things about this world that make me mad (aka, Neglect on animals.) I hope I pass a message along.


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    dotsOne Life To Losedots
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    If he could smile, he would;
    If he could speak, he would scream.
    Maybe, if his eyes were blue
    A heart would have felt them.
    If he had a pair of thumbs,
    He would have saved himself.
    If he had a helping hand,
    It could have lifted him.
    Maybe, if someone had knew,
    It wouldn’t have been this way.
    If the collar hadn’t been so tight,
    He could have squeezed out.
    If someone had spent a little money,
    He wouldn’t have starved.
    Maybe someone would’ve bothered to care,
    If he just had a shade whiter hair.
    What would have happened,
    Can never be known.
    Because, now, this innocent kitten--
    He’ll never be grown.
    Maybe, if the gate hadn’t been locked,
    He could have made it through.
    If his mother hadn’t abandoned him,
    He could be sitting with you.
    If the sun hadn’t be a little too hot,
    If the rain hadn’t fallen too hard,
    If the wind wasn’t cold and harsh.
    If we would have found him in time,
    He would still be alive.




    Submitted on 2009-06-09 23:08:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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