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    dots Submission Name: The Gallowsdots
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    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 531
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    dotsThe Gallowsdots
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    Welcome to the gallows
    where condemned men make their final cries
    their pool of blood never shallows
    and they tell no lies

    They hang there limply
    after a minute or two
    they went down so simply
    but to their word, they stayed true

    But if you want to hear the truth
    the entire barbaric story
    You'd have to be a great sleuth
    but, be warned, it's quite gory

    If you haven't learned by now
    dead men tell no tales
    they can't get up to make their final bow
    they can't lead you through their last trails

    So let them rest
    they've been through enough
    they've passed their final test
    but have not made it through the rough

    For death is just another journey
    far from over, yet almost there
    whether from the gallows or the gurney
    or from yet another dare




    Submitted on 2009-06-10 12:18:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      reading about gallows and actually seeing the gallows in real life is always completely different, but you seem to know what your talking about and i like how you didnt completely focus on bodies strung up in trees you talking about death. good write man
    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      you are an incredible poet.so since i comment on all your other poems i thought i should of commented on your last poem! so dude keep writing.i know its not so intense,but i have a fun side!
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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