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    dots Submission Name: A thousand tears to crydots
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    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsA thousand tears to crydots
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    Eyes!
    those horrible twins i despise
    over the many years they have caused nothing but pain
    for the tears i carry can fall like rain

    Not open yet have the floodgates been
    for it is still damming up the lake within
    The dam of tears, by sadness it was made
    for anything, it, i would trade

    A thousand tears to cry
    O, how i wish i would die
    around the town i wander
    upon dark thoughts i soon ponder

    My soul, filled with grief and woe
    has turned into a terrible foe
    fear within me,and darkness out
    about my survival i begin to doubt

    My internal struggle, forever has been fought
    surely win, i will not
    the tides of battle swiftly change
    my defeat, at point blank range

    The floodgates soon begin to break
    letting out their salty lake
    my soul from there, then outcried
    about my feelings i have lied

    over those things i now weep
    soon reduced to counting sheep
    towards sleep i go
    for what reason, i don't know




    Submitted on 2009-06-10 12:20:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you impress me.your work really impresses me.
    i like it.its rough but true.
    really.you are an amazing poet and i would like to hear more.
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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