Testament (c. by ruejacobs 12/10/08 3 a.m.) by ruejacobs

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Submission Name: Testament (c. by ruejacobs 12/10/08 3 a.m.) dots

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Author:	ruejacobs
ASL Info:	37/feminazi/Gehenna
Elite Ratio:	4.9 - 567/441/155
Words:	90

Class/Type:	Poetry/Venting
Total Views:	85
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	640

Description:
a Christmas poem out of context and in the sun.

Testament (c. by ruejacobs 12/10/08 3 a.m.) dots

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Blame it on a scimitar moon
No chesire-grinned reaper, she
That crone
The one that wished you harm
Sheila, she of the gaping cervix
Womb-tongued and blind
And there, my love, there
On the Cathedral walls

Blame it on the fairy-rings
Poisonous plantings
Remote forest goddesses
Arboreal nightmares
A skeletal branch
Clawed into a fist and
Shaken against stars
Blame it on the Rabbit in the Moon
On the inky depth of a forgotten and snare-placed well

Blame it
Blame it
Blame it on me.

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Blame it on me
Blame it
Blame it

On the inky depth of a forgotten and snare-placed well
Blame it on the Rabbit in the Moon
Shaken against stars
Clawed into a fist and
A skeletal branch
Arboreal nightmares
Remote forest goddesses
Poisonous plantings

Blame it on the fairy-rings
On the Cathedral walls
And there, my love, there
Womb-tongued and blind
Sheila, she of the gaping cervix
The one that wished you harm
That crone
No chesire-grinned reaper, she

Blame it on a scimitar moon

That is your poem backwards. I did this to illustrate, or maybe foggy up, a point. Each one of your lines packs the ultimate punch. The arrangement of them can be altered, and still, your lines hold their weight. This is why I love your voice. Its power, which you harness like Nemesis. Its passion, which you express like Pele.

Either I made a really good point or a really weak one.

Alia
| Posted on 2009-06-18 00:00:00 | by O | [ Reply to This ]
  you have a way of causing unrest; of instilling unease and i like that, because it would be easy enough to wander through this and other 'sites, overdosing on spiritual benzoic sulfinides - but there is no danger of that happening on your watch...

i think we have a little bit of everything in this short piece of yours; a little bit of everything that i have come to accept as your signature: allusion to the gods and where they abide; candour when it comes to the way we behave towards each other (sheila's gaping cervix is both a warning and oddly exciting - but then you would know that); and bleakness. you do bleak well and rabbits in the moon are my idea of sitting next to rorschach and explaining why all his blots are axes...

take it easy doll and stay out of trouble.

if you can.

k?

k
| Posted on 2009-06-14 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
  i would never blame it on you!
but nice work mummy!
i loves it!!
rachel:)
| Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice Work Mum.
| Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. this is really really well done. I like how it goes about putting the blaime on others and then in the end you take it onto yourself. It is a very original and astonishing work. I don't think i would change anything about it. I really love how it is ended. As if that was the only reasonable thing for it. Its very enjoyable. keep up the great work

Akai_Ame
| Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]

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