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    dots Submission Name: Finest Of Girls SO Nice?dots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Story/Love
    Total Views: 433
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       No This Didn't ACTUALLY Happen. I Just Had The Thought


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    dotsFinest Of Girls SO Nice?dots
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    ' Looked Her The Eyes I Did
    Prettiest Dame You Ever Did See.

    & I To Said ' I Want You, Entirely '
    And Yes Sir, I Knew She Was Seeded
    By The Executioner Down The Lane
    Heck, I'm The Man Responsible For That.

    But I Cared Not Her Past
    For Her Past Wasn't Her
    Nor Did I Care For Future
    For Future Wouldn't Come

    I Asked About Now, That Exact Moment
    Right After That Get Together In The Cabin Houses

    Could You Leave That Man You Laid Down With
    Just To Spend Your Life With Me ? '

    The Last Words Of My Uncle
    Before He Died On The Chopping Block




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      THIS IS FLIPPIN AWSOME! ! ! I love it. And it has a stephen King Dark Towerish feel to it which is AWSOME. An the ending line was amazing. The middle was so nice though it nearly made me cry because of the sincerity and the way it pulled in the reader. This has to be one of my favorite writes by you. GREAT piece, Keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2009-06-10 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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