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    dots Submission Name: Togetherdots
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    Author: Akai_Ame
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 223/181/46
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       I haven't wrote anything in years, so i don't even think i'm good at it anymore. My life is odd right now.... this poem is based off of it. Please comment and tell me what you think about it. maybe i'll start to write more.


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    dotsTogetherdots
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    Things were looking up.
    We had finally gotten on our feet.
    long had we waited for this,
    finding the consistency we'd missed.

    Together we pulled through disasters.
    held close to the fact that we'd prevail.
    Nothing could do us harm,
    as long as it was you in my arms.

    We never saw it coming.
    never even stopped to ponder.
    it was something that could be,
    the end of you and me.

    Never would I have imagined.
    that Id hear those words.
    feel the anguish and pain.
    its enough to go insane.

    The doctor tried to say it nice.
    she tried to sugar coat it.
    but no matter how it came,
    our lives would never be the same.

    "we're sorry, its cancer."
    "there's surgery and radiation."
    No matter what we'd have to do.
    you promised we'd make it through.

    I believed in you, in us.
    When you held my hand.
    you were my everything,
    my strength when I had nothing.

    Nothing could come between us.
    nothing would destroy love like this.
    however we didn't count on,
    taking on something so strong.

    love is strong,
    yet not enough for this.
    but it's alright
    because we're going to give it all our might.

    Together we will pull through disasters.
    hold close to the fact that we'll prevail.
    Nothing could do us harm,
    as long as it was you in my arms.




    Submitted on 2009-06-10 23:56:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is sad, but it has loyalty, strength, and conviction. Our trials are what makes our bonds even stronger. Your positive nature and a mature love shine through in this, and it gives all of us hope and promotes a silent prayer from us all for your well being (both of you).

    Excellent work! Thank you for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2010-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sweet. :) It is also very sad... I hope you're not really going through that, but if you are, I'm really sorry.. I'm not sure I have the words to say for that...

    As for the poem, there were times I could tell you hadn't written in a while. It seemed, at moments, a bit forced and dry. You should take some time to get back in the motion, and relax, so the words will flow out of you like raindrops. Once you have given it the freedom it needs, your writing will return to its former state. And you will enjoy it again. :)


    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by myownvitality | [ Reply to This ]


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