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    dots Submission Name: Perfectly Impossibledots
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    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 619
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1087



    Description:
       Blarghy, I know this isn't the most creative or intricate piece of whatever I've written... but as it does have a complete and functional tune and came straight from my heart (uninhibited), I like it~


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    dotsPerfectly Impossibledots
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    If you were a book
    I'd never put you down,
    Read from cover to cover
    Then turn around
    And do it all over again.

    If you were an angel
    I'd cut off both your wings.
    You would feel no pain,
    But be right here with me,
    On the ground.

    I love you like a junkie loves her syringe,
    Like a lonely kid needs her imaginary friend,
    Like birds love the spring,
    I need you with me.

    If the world were ending
    I'd hold you close and tight,
    Listen to your heartbeat
    And know we'd be alright
    While all is falling apart.

    If I were to wake
    And find this all a dream,
    I'd always close my eyes
    And feel your love for me,
    And keep it in my heart.

    I love you like a junkie loves her syringe,
    Like a lonely kid needs her imaginary friend,
    Like birds love the spring,
    And like all that love means-
    You know I'll never leave
    I need you with me.




    Submitted on 2009-06-11 07:38:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I would love to hear this to a tune.....kind of reminds me of say, Edger Allen Poe in love,


    I liked it.......appeals to my dark side.

    Spin
    | Posted on 2009-07-18 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
      The simplicity and straightforwardness of it is great. Reminds me of my earlier poems...which I now reminisce about as if it were fishing trips wit my pops or somethin. Anyway, this earnest, straightforward style of writing is something I will always cherish and love about my childhood. And is something I love seeing recreated within other peoples writing. Kinda like how they say you pick all of your subsequent mates after your first love.

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    red
    | Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by red_summer | [ Reply to This ]


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