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    dots Submission Name: Gotta have herdots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 645
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 988



    Description:
       Just talking about every mans dream girl or his super woman


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    dotsGotta have herdots
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    Her very sight is the very conversation on which I thrive
    Her skin like the very air that keeps me alive
    Her skin tone is the water in which I dive
    Her eyes is airplane to me sky
    I gotta have her
    She is a want and a need all at the same time
    That stimulates my body and elevates my mind
    My stress reliever that helps move the sun into nights
    And revive my dead heart and give it life
    I Gotta have her
    She is bad but yet she is good
    A lady at times but there moments that she is hood
    Her very smell fills me up and she constantly gives me food for thought
    In her light that she has share with me I find myself loss
    At a loss for words turning my tongue on mute
    Her smiles everything that is good and true
    I gotta have her
    She has to be tired from running all these laps in my head
    Going from one chapter to the next the title she’s mine is read





    Submitted on 2009-06-11 20:01:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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