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    dots Submission Name: The Sindots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Sindots
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    A single violin plays
    of graveyard abandon
    from the hands of God
    to our hearts
    Leaves us longing for more
    from Satan's score
    The burning dance
    of the poison darts.




    Submitted on 2009-06-11 21:33:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it, but I think it you could a lot more to it to make it so much better then it is now. I think its good, but like most things it could be better and with this since its so short and the images are vivid I think it'd be something worth a bit of developing haha nice write.
    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems rather short, and free verse, at least for the first few lines. I prefer rhymes, but I rather liked it. The whole religious view was interesting, though, I think that it was a metaphor for something, though I'm not quite sure what. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]
      
    It brings to mind the basic images of the gothic genre. It sounds pretty when spoken but I think because it is so short it leaves a lot of ambiguity.
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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