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    Author: nolram
    ASL Info:    29/M
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 58/61/33
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Please God let me feel good again
    It's been a while since I've known my friends
    I don't know how much more I can take
    Even the familiar comforts are beginning to fade
    A cry for help is useless when you've been rendered completely helpless
    Not crazy enough to be dragged away
    Too crazy to see clearly
    The endless cycle digs deep into the soul
    Fuck everyone who is losing faith
    I'm not always this way
    There are those who say, they have been there all the time,
    but where are you when I'm really alone?
    We are all really alone.
    I guess I push people away
    A neurotic obsession with notions such as the fact that no one can ever be completely certain that what they are percieving is anything comparable to what someone else is seeing and allowing that to fester into extreme sadness when faced with enormous issues that could result in loss of freedom and physical and mental well being.
    No matter how much you try to hug me, when I am this way I push back because you don't see the same blue that I do.

    Or maybe you do.

    But my heart hearts.

    And I am fucking scared.

    Pulse.

    Sex.

    Atraction.

    Feelings.

    Emotions.

    circuits.

    wiring.

    flesh.

    bones.

    cartilage.

    time.

    why do you ask what is wrong?

    I'm fucking scared.

    Is anyone out there?

    Please God let me know.




    Submitted on 2009-06-12 04:13:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW.... talk about deep thought DAM... this is an amazing writing.. at first I was like wow I'm really going to like this then in the middle I wasn't all that sure of where this was going but you have me ... I wanted to find out I wanted to know how it was going to end.. this is a heartfelt emotional write and just down right AMAZING

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-06-17 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      O my, you are a deep thinker up to the top of your hat, let me comment quick while you are still drowning.

    Before I converted to shallow, I used to try and say this - what you say in this poem - but I didn't have a hope. I now know that it was because I were shallow all the time.

    So my reaction is partly jealousy! I am a type of person who admires passion from afar .. my relationship with your work is exploitive! (I just read all your posts, so this is a general reaction.)

    Favourite line: "Where are you when I'm really alone?"
    | Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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