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    dots Submission Name: Shattered dots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    19/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 153/196/213
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 62
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    dotsShattered dots
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    Shattered, broken, bleeding on the floor.
    Hurting, hating, loving all the same.
    Pain, betrayal, and anger all in one.
    Left me with no hope,
    No heart right now… it still belongs to you.
    And you are there in front of me squeezing it,
    Ripping it, stabbing it… And I won’t let anyone else touch it.
    Just wish I had never met you so that I could feel normal.
    Just wish I hadn’t fallen for you,
    Just wish you hadn’t lied.
    I wish I could be enough for you.
    I guess he’ll never know what he gave up.




    Submitted on 2009-06-12 10:58:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the rhythm, and I can identify with it, having gone through most of the content of the poem in my own life :P
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by HarlequinFelis | [ Reply to This ]


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