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    dots Submission Name: No Boy dots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    19/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 153/196/213
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 77
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1562



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    dotsNo Boy dots
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    No boy has ever bought me things and spoiled me,
    And you come along with roses and chocolate.

    No boy has respected my limits and boundaries,
    And you come along and don’t even try.

    No boy has ever complimented me so much,
    And you come along and help make me feel amazing.

    No boy has ever looked at me so focused,
    And you come along and stare.

    No boy has treated me so special,
    Yet you come along and never set a foot wrong.

    No boy has come close to what you are,
    And you left me behind and broke my heart.

    No boy has made me wish with so much venom I had never met them,
    And you went along on your way leaving me hating myself for loving you.

    No boy has ever flipped my world around so much,
    And you went along to leave it a big mess.

    No boy has ever made me feel so breathless,
    And you left me that way- absolutely shattered.

    No boy has ever seen the future with such clarity and hope,
    And you go after crushing my dreams.

    No boy has ever made me trust them so completely,
    And you lied straight to my face.

    No boy has been able to rebuild the walls that had been torn down,
    And you demolished them too.

    There is no boy in the world at all like you,
    And no boy has hurt me like you,
    No boy ever had me so blinded,
    Then left me cold like that.




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      i love the set up of this peom great job
    | Posted on 2009-06-17 00:00:00 | by sparkleshine | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like how it appears the poem is going to get sweeter only to flip while still holding down the "no boy" repetition. It caught me by surprise and will probably do the same to other readers. I can feel your anger increase as I read...Nice touch...

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    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by Brianpoem | [ Reply to This ]
      your always here
    you never went home
    i could be so lonely
    but im never alone

    in my reality
    your so far away
    in my mind
    your here to stay

    i wrote this for "michah",when i was going through my heart break.it was like he was there.i kept trying to compare my new boyfriends to him.but i learned to compare him to my new boyfriends.he didnt have such an impact on me when i did that.so can i give you some advice?stop thinking of him as "the one"and start thinking him as"the one who disowned you" or"the one who broke you down".write down all the bad things about him,and i know at frist it going to be hard to think of some.but when you do,eachtime you will be getting stronger.
    hope it helps!
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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