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    dots Submission Name: Elevatedots

    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 464
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    Bytes: 1217

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    Pupils dilate,
    Roll it up in freight.
    Its no drag.
    Just another pull.
    to help you elevate.
    Satiate the hunger
    Donít let it pull you under.
    Sunder another.
    Chill with the buds
    Sit yo-self.
    All upon the wealth.
    Of good company.
    People come wit me.
    This way youíll see.
    The world unfiltered,
    And unrefined,
    The way I be.
    Iíll be blunt with you.
    There ainít nothing you can do.
    But live it up.
    And sleep it off.
    Stick Ďround the crowd.
    And donít eíer keep still.
    Make life what you will.
    If you loose the motivation.
    Take a look
    Donít check the book.
    Just peace out.
    And twist and shout.
    Pass the ball,
    And pack another
    Find a lova
    Donít get down,
    Just keep it up.
    Pour yourself anotha cup.
    Step up.
    And keep yo mind
    Neír look behind.
    Whatís done is done.
    And thereís doing to do.
    So stop, pack, and roll.
    Climb out yo hole.
    Stop playin a role.
    Go wit the flow
    And lifeíll show you.
    Just what you gotta do.

    Submitted on 2009-06-12 18:34:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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