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    dots Submission Name: if i had to!dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 615
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 626



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       luck has nothing to do with it!


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    dotsif i had to!dots
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    if i had to fall i guess it was best to fall short
    if i had to crawl the worst is in the work
    if i had to listen i would have to care
    if i had a chance i wouldnt be here

    if i had a choice i would choose you
    if i had to give up i would have to lose
    if i had your number i would call anyway
    if i had to speak i would think then say

    if i had to be there i would stand up tall
    if i had to give them away i would give it all
    if i had a dollar for every mistake ive made
    if i had to be the one who got away.







    Submitted on 2009-06-12 20:09:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Extremely good. I enjoyed reading this, while I feel that it could have been just a bit longer. great job
    | Posted on 2009-07-15 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]
      nice!!
    | Posted on 2009-06-14 00:00:00 | by Luvmiannie | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this, it really told your thoughts in what you would think to be a simple way, but had much more depth than I first saw.
    I would definatley liked to have read more if you expanded on each, but I know that was not the purpose of the poem.
    very well done
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by HayleyJay | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting well wrote keep up the work
    if u get a chance please stop by and rate seom of mine thanks
    have anice day
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by sparkleshine | [ Reply to This ]
      well i should explain a little.i wrote journal way back and i like it so i made it into a poem!
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      Different but nice. I liked the rhymes, but I don't think I got it. Great work though! Keep it up!!!! You're an amazing poet.
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]


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