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    dots Submission Name: The #1 Cause of Death...LOVEdots

    Author: Brianpoem
    ASL Info:    26/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 7/1/1
    Words: 373
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       It's the reason the majority of us leave this Earth! LOVE...

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    dotsThe #1 Cause of Death...LOVEdots

    People die everyday. Thatís a statable fact
    Dying from different but somehow relateable acts
    But the truth behind death has never been dug
    You see the number one cause of death is love

    The love for tobacco makes us buy cigarettes
    Knowing that every inhalation is slowly taking our breath
    We fail to use contraceptives--itís the love for the sex
    But then we end up with diseases--love puts us to rest

    We fall in love with each other without a shadow of doubt
    Buy a ring, get on one knee, and then become the spouse
    But when the relationship is folding, love cries out for help
    The love is strong...he shoots his wife then turns the gun on himself

    It is the hate for death that keeps us alive
    But the love for a good life makes us commit suicide
    Love is in our nature, it was placed in our will
    We can love violence so much that it can cause us to kill

    We love alcohol because it changes our vibe
    And we love it to death as we drink and we drive
    Eating unhealthy foods we all know is unsafe
    But we do it anyway due to the love for the taste

    I mean, we all love something because the feelingís fulfilling
    But Al-Qaedaís love made them fly planes in to our buildings
    The world is showing love like never before
    As the love for power keeps our nations at war

    And I love poetry and I would die for the pen
    Resurrect, write another piece and die once again
    Put my belief in God in every one of my lines
    Go back in time to í99 and enroll in Columbine

    Whether itís the love for this or the love for that
    Itís the love for the crack that makes the fiends come back
    The love for the cause...Dr. King was lost
    And the love for the people got Jesus nailed to a cross

    So our habits, our wants, our needs, our beliefs
    All things we love and intend to keep
    For it seems that no matter what walk of life we are of
    The number one cause of death is still love.

    Submitted on 2009-06-13 00:09:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      DAMN..... this is AMAZING... wow.. after reading this I'm beginning to feel as if all my other Fav's can't even begin to COMPARE to yours... I don't even know where to begin? I love the set up and I much admit at first I felt i wasn't going to enjoy this it seemed too long and as if you were only going to be repeating yourself. but NO I was surprised the more i read the more I like and the more I liked it the more I wanted to read. you have me drooling over ever word i read... wanting more. WOW... if i could make a fav #1 yours would be my #1 fav (and I have a lot of fav's)


    keep posting i swear i'll be your #1 fan... all your write like this
    | Posted on 2009-06-17 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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