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    dots Submission Name: Time Recedesdots

    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 718
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1011


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    dotsTime Recedesdots

    Long ago, deep in the past
    there was nothing to make it last
    the days were long, the years were short
    it all went by with nothing to report
    and we all sang out our plea's
    the night that time recedes

    Time Recedes
    pulling us back
    Time Recedes
    ain't cutting us no slack
    careful where you sow your seeds
    the night that time recedes

    You find it's often not told
    the idea that time sold
    you listen to it's words, all lies
    your mind, outraged, then outcries
    from everything your ear receives
    you have learned, time deceives

    Time Deceives
    pulling us in
    Time Deceives
    with a wide grin
    careful of ideas your mind conceives
    when time deceives

    Time Recedes
    pulling us back
    Time recedes
    ain't cutting us no slack
    careful where you sow your seeds
    when time recedes

    Submitted on 2009-06-13 00:41:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The repetition makes your poems good songs. Do you sing them? The music of this one is like small waves on a beach during ebb tide.
    | Posted on 2009-06-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      i didnt comment on this one.wow.surprise.
    i loved it!
    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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