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    dots Submission Name: Never moredots
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    Author: Scaredheart
    ASL Info:    15/ Female/ NC
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 92/62/50
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 40
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1062



    Description:
       This is life, an' life's life. Hard, crule, and not all rainbows and sunshine, so don't friggin try to tell me it is. Cause that's a lie.


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    Never more
    She runs to her room and cries (she's crying),
    Closing the door.
    She so ashamed she has to hide, she doesn't want anyone to see, (The mascara running down her cheeks) the scars on her arms.
    Badge's that depression left her (left her),
    she has seem her dreams crumble down, down into the sea.
    The raging sea's (The sea, the sea)
    She's hiding in a corner,letting her face fall.
    She Never wanted to lose it all, to face what she was never told. (Never told, never told)
    The family falling apart,
    smiling in every photo.
    The mother saying she's a lost cause,
    the father holding tightly to shattered dreams.
    Bliss was foretold in her dreams,
    misfortune in her dazed day's.
    she's out cold, drained of life. (Losing life, losing life)
    Blood surrounding her mutilated arm's.
    Death a never more, never more, never more.
    She's running to her room, she's closing her doors.




    Submitted on 2009-06-13 10:10:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Everytime i read this poem it makes me want to go up to you and hug you! It really gets you to think about ohter peoples lives, because you cant honestly know what everyone else's lives are like. I love you
    | Posted on 2009-06-17 00:00:00 | by Monsun | [ Reply to This ]


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